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I haven't woken so happy
As I have today

I stepped on familiar clouds
And listened for your glide

I saw you
When you turned around

In your same white dress
Shining in your radiance

You looked so pretty
Standing before you

I must've looked so cheesy
When you smiled back at me

I awoke on a heavenly bed
And pondered of you

When we speak again, so soon now
I will do my all for you
©2008-2010 ~Heerenveen
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Author's Comments

The structure is unique, I think I have a habit of making four-lined stanzas in a ABAB rhyming schedule (and rhyming in every poem I produce), so I decided to experiment. Each pair of lines need to mean something to be worthy of isolation in the poem, so I wrote the best as I can with tired eyes. I am happy to display this, so I satisfied with the poem.

Titles are a biggy. I've become enamoured with the idea of giving a poem or prose a different name from any word used in the work itself, as to expand on the "redundancy rule", of not using the same specific word over and over. Although, I imagine I'll get sick of doing this at somepoint and start calling songs about cars "Cars and shizzle" again.

Have a good weekend. The next piece of work will probably be a short story that isn't Sigourney 08. This will do my moral compass well.

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